tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-838644232340959537.post8988967554496373195..comments2024-03-29T18:38:36.109+13:00Comments on Dutchcorner: The key to livingMarjahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17458942200244031009noreply@blogger.comBlogger16125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-838644232340959537.post-58382743516329061372022-05-13T12:40:27.331+12:002022-05-13T12:40:27.331+12:00The rewrite shows how much you have grown. Such a...The rewrite shows how much you have grown. Such a beautiful poem!purplepeninportland.comhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07842681508730093858noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-838644232340959537.post-54746331797184596642022-05-11T20:21:44.956+12:002022-05-11T20:21:44.956+12:00Talented person you are. Your ever first is simpli...Talented person you are. Your ever first is simplicity at its best. The second shows you have matured and questioning life and its evolutionkestrelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13324874202422690542noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-838644232340959537.post-21471701020939331912022-05-10T04:49:39.091+12:002022-05-10T04:49:39.091+12:00Both poems have much charm; I like them both. The...Both poems have much charm; I like them both. The second one shows more wisdom I think. You are very skillful with words and can bring feelings and music with them.Vagabondehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10774109692564954568noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-838644232340959537.post-57079097939527854322022-05-10T04:32:22.147+12:002022-05-10T04:32:22.147+12:00Love, love the enhanced version ... great job!Love, love the enhanced version ... great job!Helenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16619199535376925989noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-838644232340959537.post-81615908818360141012022-05-09T00:32:53.168+12:002022-05-09T00:32:53.168+12:00From simple to beautiful like a tree that's bl...From simple to beautiful like a tree that's blossomed! Keith's Ramblingshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13564578491652021492noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-838644232340959537.post-43247240995095756022022-05-08T14:36:14.023+12:002022-05-08T14:36:14.023+12:00i love both versions.
The first is concise, puttin...i love both versions.<br />The first is concise, putting the message across quickly. The rewrite gives the same message but in a more elegant way. It shows the author's growth as a writer. dsnake1https://www.blogger.com/profile/08724264906690080704noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-838644232340959537.post-75271581215204837512022-05-08T05:11:40.149+12:002022-05-08T05:11:40.149+12:00Interesting re-write. I like how you fleshed it o...Interesting re-write. I like how you fleshed it out some more.Brother Olliehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07506492407482879487noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-838644232340959537.post-62031074753323383902022-05-08T04:10:20.595+12:002022-05-08T04:10:20.595+12:00Two different styles, both very cool. I think of t...Two different styles, both very cool. I think of them as two different poems. I like the directness of your original poem and the romanticness of your second. Su-sieee! Machttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12515318972570669414noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-838644232340959537.post-86198796419571927452022-05-08T01:17:49.928+12:002022-05-08T01:17:49.928+12:00So great to see how one grows and thinking expands...So great to see how one grows and thinking expands and becomes more expressive. Love the opening two lines of the revised version.Thotpurgehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09729170517164200003noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-838644232340959537.post-16904911907361059412022-05-07T13:00:13.847+12:002022-05-07T13:00:13.847+12:00I like the musicality of the words in your second ...I like the musicality of the words in your second poem, but I'd like to see it a bit more squeezed together like the first - But SO fun to see the beautiful progression of skill! Well done. Margarethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00007201357693227614noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-838644232340959537.post-5212533486839277802022-05-07T09:23:00.299+12:002022-05-07T09:23:00.299+12:00I enjoyed both versions, but love the precise lang...I enjoyed both versions, but love the precise language and direct tone of the rewrite. Such a powerful invitation... Magaly Guerrerohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18295455026184103230noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-838644232340959537.post-80302487410709996582022-05-07T06:50:06.706+12:002022-05-07T06:50:06.706+12:00I think I agree with DUTA. The second is very lyri...I think I agree with DUTA. The second is very lyrical but the first is more concise. I'm drawn to that one.Debi Swimhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08255928985823418669noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-838644232340959537.post-10317203944119552012022-05-07T02:34:29.661+12:002022-05-07T02:34:29.661+12:00I like the first poem; it's simple and straigh...I like the first poem; it's simple and straightforward. It's about the key to heart and what we might find there.. The second poem, more sophisticated, is about the key to living. The process of living is a rather complicated one, involving soul , mind , needs and feelings.DUTAhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12979375799258978432noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-838644232340959537.post-11822532036252384532022-05-07T02:32:45.339+12:002022-05-07T02:32:45.339+12:00Some really lush word choices in the update. They ...Some really lush word choices in the update. They definitely add a musicality to the piece as Rosemary said. Rommyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18343895193475984183noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-838644232340959537.post-15755150761464049182022-05-06T20:14:36.724+12:002022-05-06T20:14:36.724+12:00Hi Marja - you can see you've grown in your th...Hi Marja - you can see you've grown in your thought processes and ideas of the mind - lovely to read both - cheers HilaryHilary Melton-Butcherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17596532480645510678noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-838644232340959537.post-70945192034374758382022-05-06T18:37:26.477+12:002022-05-06T18:37:26.477+12:00Wow! Reading the original, I thought, 'Hey, th...Wow! Reading the original, I thought, 'Hey, that's not real bad!' But the second version is so much moire musical, graceful and deep! It changes into a beautiful poem what was, after all, more of a homily – saying the same kind of thing, yes, but a very different level. <br /><br />(It seems a few of us chose to rewrite our very first poem!)Rosemary Nissen-Wadehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05913841031559499568noreply@blogger.com