Message in a bottle
A bottle drifting off
Playing hide and seek
in the waves until
softly colliding with the sand
Reflecting sunlight sparkles
touching his eyes
awaken him from a world
of memories and missed opportunities
to the empty horizon of today
He than catches the mysterious
message in a bottle, reading:
Dear God,
Mum says dad is far away
so far we can't go there
Tell him I was angry
but I do love him
Give me a sign that he is ok
Love, Billy
Aroha town
Aroha town
A tear colouring the ink
painting his heart
and his horizon
in vibrant new colours
A postcard arrives reading:
Dear Billy,
Whatever happened
your dad loves you very much
He is doing well
A messenger from God
Leaving the door behind
the man drove to a future
including his family
returning the value
to where it belongs
Hey--well done.I found this prompt really difficult--you have written beautifully.
ReplyDeleteyou have realy a great talent sis, I didn't know that you are so good with this. like it very much. succes.
ReplyDeleteNice poem but if I read the title of your posting I have to think on the movie : Message in a bottle; it is a romantic movie with Paul Newman. I really need to watch this movie again.
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Marja, This post is one reason I love to visit this blog. This is so touching. Simply beautiful. I really enjoyed it.
ReplyDeleteThanks,
Ann
extremely well done, I am just wondering which one he liked the best the first message or the second one.
ReplyDeleteVery moving poem. Well done!
ReplyDeleteOhhh Marija, that is so beautiful, if only it was that easy, Thank You!
ReplyDeletei love poems and this one is great. not everyone can create poem. ;0)
ReplyDeleteThis made me cry. Good stuff Marja.
ReplyDeleteWhat a lovely idea, sweetly expressed! If only.....
ReplyDeleteThanks PS
ReplyDeleteBert I just discovered it myself but still have a lot to learn. Thanks though
Thanks and Nice day to you too Rebicmel
Yeh when I read the prompt I got the song from Police stuck in my head
Thanks Ann
Rambler thanks the second one was written by him
Thanks Herb Urban
I know Redness It is a bit of wishfull thinking but miracles do happen
I am honered reign
Thanks you dear Robin
I know Jo. But I created awareness to raise awareness.
That was lovely, full of hope, I am sure Billy would forever be thankful..superb.
ReplyDeletewhat a lovely basis for a further story... loved it
ReplyDeleteGod does exist for forelone boys...
ReplyDeleteVery well depicted.
That's a very sweet story and lovely poem. It's beautiful when strangers step in to help another stranger - the bounty of human kindness and goodness. Thanks for this.
ReplyDeletewhen you have people read this a few times to truly absorb your words, you know your writing is something that touches ours hearts..
ReplyDeletepeace, kai
Astonishing. Truly wondeful. This one should be put up in lights. Congratulations Marja
ReplyDeleteWhat a poignant, yet lovely - take on the prompt!
ReplyDeletemarja, well done indeed... You caught it perfectly.....
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Oh, I agree! Loved it. Very nicely done. I could feel the little jolt of settling the bottle did.
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Have a nice day!
-Baba Doodlius
P.S. Cool poem. I wish I could do that.
Hey Girl, I wanted to let you know that I nominated you for the Candied Apple Award in addition to the Community Blogger award. Congrats!
ReplyDeleteAnn
Ah, how beautifully written. Poignant, perfect.
ReplyDeleteul, Billy was very thankful
ReplyDeletePaisley thanks maybe one day
Gautami, yes especially for loneboys
Paris parfait Yes there is nothing better than that thanks
Kaibluecreations wow what a lovely comment
Keith I am blushing
Thanks Tinker
Beloved dreamer what a dream comment
A little jolt of settling. Mary Timme another poem is born
Thanks Baba but Mel already offered it. You should try poetry. Birds can do that too ;)
Ann you overwelm me.
Hi Jen nice to meet you here thanks
tumblewords You tumble me with your words
Marja, this is so lovely and gentle and sad. You do a wonderful job of carrying the reader along with the poem like the bottle softly bobbing in the ocean. Like many others, this made me cry a little, but in a good way. Thank you for sharing this amazing piece.
ReplyDeleteSo beautiful, Marja!
ReplyDeletekiss :)))
It would have been easy to read the message an forget, however the strangers compassion shown through, giving hope to us all. Well Done! Thank you for such a compassionate prose.
ReplyDeleteScott
Marja....that was beautiful and touching. Bravo!
ReplyDeleteI couldn't wrap my head around this prompt, so decided to take a pass. I'm glad you didn't! Your offering to the writers island is wonderful.