Tuesday, 1 August 2017

The escape

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“Look Kayaks! let’s take them."   “They might be from some tourists?” said Ella
“Ella, Worry about them later. You won’t survive another week here.”  He was right. She was malnourished and hurt.

Two weeks ago, they were over the moon. They went to a bar and a man, called Pete talked to them. He offered them a trip to his island on a luxury yacht. The next morning, they set out early. Pete sailed the boat into a narrow inlet. He told them to hop off and follow the path. He would come in a minute.

Suddenly two men grabbed them and pushed them forwards towards a work camp. They were held for two weeks and had to work in the heat on the land day after day.
Luckily Ella had some cash in her pocket and paid one of the guards to look the other way so they could escape. They succeeded.They jumped in the kayaks and paddled away.

161 words


  1. Interesting idea. It would be a bit easier to read and understand characters with if you add some spacing in the lines. Good tension here, space it out and make the brain pause ass it happens

    1. Thanks for the tip Mark. I added some spaces

  2. Hi Marja - well done - good story ... one wonders about the island. Another story another day! Cheers Hilary

  3. Lovely story, so good those kayaks were there, haha.

  4. A lot of story in a few words Marja. Would love to read more about the island and the work camp - who was running it and what for? Good stuff.

  5. thank God for the kayak that they could make their escape. Interesting story about the island , its captured labourers and finally the escape.


  6. Lucky escape , indeed . Thank God for the cash on her . Nice story, Maria .

  7. This reminded me of LOST. They get to escape only in a cruel twist get captured again. The Island will never let them out :D Well written, Marja

    Click to read about the last men on earth

  8. Nicely done! You put a lot of information in a tight package.

  9. Wow! That guy is a crooked slave dealer. Enjoyed the story.


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