The prompt for the local poetry group was Lost and found. So I went car keys, wallet, jacket....love
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When the Mist Remembers
sunrays sneaking through the door
witnessing the wonder of love
we flung the windows open
let the wind whisper softness
let music play the minstrel
the cello humming in our chest
but time tipped its hat sideways
love stopped walking straight
one day its petals scattered
the moon thinned to a sliver
your attention drip‑dried
the sky emptied of your voice
your face fractured like glass
my heart bleeding blue
clutching strokes of memory
my mind shredding them to scraps
leaving me with longing
that never learned to end
life washed the pain downstream
until one morning smiled at me
mist veiled the waking land
a breath moved between two souls
who didn’t yet know
they were touching
"leaving me with longing
ReplyDeletethat never learned to end"
such poignant lines that resonate with me.
I'm glad she found hope as a new beginning awoke at the end.
Really beautiful, Marja. I love the whole of the second stanza especially and the lines at the end:
ReplyDelete"a breath moved between two souls
who didn’t yet know
they were touching"
Three great movements here and there is something magical in those moments before knowing!
ReplyDeleteUy que romántico poema. Te mando un beso
ReplyDeleteBeautifully romantic, I really love time tipped its hat sideways.
ReplyDeleteA tender and hopeful write Marja 👏 I too, enjoyed the lines others have mentioned above. 👍
ReplyDeleteI love the way this poem drifts and meanders on romance and loss, Marja, the ‘cello humming in our chest’, time tipping its hat sideways, and the hopeful ending with one smiling morning.
ReplyDelete...these words paint lovely pictures in my mind.
ReplyDeleteSimplesmente maravilhoso e os versos finais um show! Adorei!
ReplyDeletebeijos, lindo fim de semana, chiuca
Oh my, this one tugs on the "cello"" strings at all the right places. Very beautiful, a bit painful but the ending is sweet and made me smile.
ReplyDeleteI love the second stanza. That seems to say it all.
ReplyDeleteThe imagery of that closeness in breath says so much
ReplyDelete"the moon thinned to a sliver
ReplyDeleteyour attention drip‑dried
the sky emptied of your voice" I love this transitional line to the next part and the questions raised that were soon answered in yuour final epic last line. Well done 🩵
Oh, the heartbreak! I love how winsomely and brilliantly you describe the fracturing of a relationship, while leaving a little hope at the end.
ReplyDeleteOh my goodness, this is gorgeous. Wonderful use of metaphor, Marja. I got goosebumps reading the close. <3
ReplyDeleteloved the poem with the emotions swaying and the hats tilting. I feel glad about love returning and it usually does to those willing to take another chance -
ReplyDeleteDear Marja, this is an amazing poem!
ReplyDeleteSuch tenderly expressed thoughts - gentle and flowing - Jae
ReplyDeleteIn some ways a retrospective on my life!
ReplyDeleteSuch tender lines, Marja.
ReplyDeleteI felt the ache in the middle and the quiet hope at the end.
Beautifully done.