The prompt for Poets and storytellers united is dance
I have written many dance poems so here a slightly different dance :)
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Barefoot at the Edge
I stand barefoot at the edge,
looking out over the world.
The wind lifts the leaves to dance,
the sea tempts the waves to dance,
energy in motion.
My heart suddenly stills the sea.
A melody rises from its womb,
an adagio holding love and pain,
born between the notes.
The tension swells into a storm.
Until my breath grows calm
and I release emotion to the sky,
giving it space and air.
The sea hushes its voice
and folds into the sky’s embrace.
The birds emerge in trust,
uncaged from heaviness,
chaos transformed into freedom,
carried by lightness.
I dance with the birds.
It's all good but that last stanza clinched it for me.
ReplyDeleteI can see it, hear it, feel it!
ReplyDeleteWhat a beautiful, wise and accepting poem - if flows like water and breath - Jae
ReplyDeleteBeautifully written, Marja. I especially love these lines:
ReplyDelete‘A melody rises from its womb,
an adagio holding love and pain,
born between the notes.’
Lovely verse; great reflections.
ReplyDeleteA passionate piece, Marja. I like the creative imagery of pent up emotions being released into the sky like birds from a cage.
ReplyDeleteThis is absolutely beautifully written! I love the idea of so many elements dancing here: the leaves, the sea, the birds, and you. And the addition of musical elements to set the mood: a melody, and adagio. And then the freedom of the birds "carried by lightness" and you dance with them in that spirit. Beautiful!
ReplyDeleteBird dancing!
ReplyDeleteThis feels like such a beautiful journey from inner chaos to inner calm.
ReplyDeleteSuch s wonderful write Marja! 🙂
ReplyDeletean elemental, wistful poem - delightful to read especially
ReplyDelete"The tension swells into a storm.
Until my breath grows calm"
Your second stanza and beginning of your third remind me how I often feel oceanside with the rise and swell and releasing of my own emotions. Very well captured, Marja <3
ReplyDeleteLove your "dancing with the birds." "Light as a feather."
ReplyDeleteBeautiful image and verse.
ReplyDeleteThere is so much magic in those moments of much needed release.
ReplyDeleteLOVE the imagery. See, people rip on purple prose these days but a new way of turning a phrase, and artistic twist of words that lead us somewhere unexpected... I just love it.
ReplyDelete"The sea hushes its voice
ReplyDeleteand folds into the sky’s embrace."
Two lovely lines among many. I love the direction you took with this prompt.